Thesis
: Korea and china have both similarities and differences in the parts of family structure, holidays and respect of seniority.
3 Topic sentences
1. First important feature of both Korean and Chinese culture is the family structure which have similarities and differences.
2. Next one is similarities and differences between Korean and Chinese culture about
the holidays.
3. Last part is similarities and differences about the respect of seniority in Korean and Chinese culture.
Good work but for sentence variety try switching the placement of the topic and controlling ideas. Try to begin one of your topic sentences with the controlling idea in front. 95
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